Walton Novels

Writer's Comments - This is based off the game Far Cry 2. But not exact of the developer and publisher Ubisoft will chase me.

[font=Arial Black]Sam NOO!!!,[/font] don't do it. I beg you, You can't base a book off a game (except WoW but thats different.), especially if you don't have permission. DON"T DO IT SAM!!!!!

lol. In a slightly less extreme way, I agree with Tureri. Even WoW's going a bit far.

Sam YES!!! It's not exactly off of FAr Cry it's about a person being a mercenary in Africa just like Far Cry everything else (hopefully everything else) will be different.

Xcept the M249 SAWs?

Hey! Hey!!! The M249 SAW is a weapon used in all gun games! Don't dis it!

lol... xP You know I'm kidding...

One thing: it's "madman" and not "mad man." Very minor, but I'd like to point it out anyway.

"incapacitating"? You mean "decapitating"? Cuz "incapacitating" doesn't seem like the right word.

Incapacitated as in just dead.. not with his head gone.. just dead..

I see... but "incapacitated" is not necessarily death. it could be like a limb chopped off.

It's "nowhere... not no where."

Just some spelling, ect. Its a convo me and Samuel had on Msn, so he doesn't have to replie and I don't have to rewrite it.

Firing once, the bullet leaves the barrel and skims the back of the shell; it creates
a spark launching all the small pellets scattering toward the hostile.

Samuel says (10:28 AM):
i know
Tureri says (10:28 AM):
last time i checked, shotgun shells weren't spark
Samuel says (10:28 AM):
the pellets wouldn't go far
Tureri says (10:28 AM):
that too
Samuel says (10:28 AM):
um
Samuel says (10:28 AM):
something hits the back which is metal
Tureri says (10:29 AM):
yea and it kinda compresses
Tureri says (10:29 AM):
and explodes
Samuel says (10:29 AM):
which ignites the gunpowder stuffed in with the pellets
Tureri says (10:29 AM):
yea
Samuel says (10:29 AM):
so thats why i'm saying
Tureri says (10:29 AM):
don't worry then
Samuel says (10:29 AM):
it would just fall and the shell would go everywhere

he attempts to fix up the engine by readjusting the oils and liquids.
Samuel says (10:29 AM):
i'm not a car engine geek
Tureri says (10:30 AM):
Ummm if it changing volumes you should, say maybe, Replacing the oils, and liquids
Tureri says (10:31 AM):
just a suggestion

Next to
her is "he" partner still unconscious with a black and purple bruise on the side of his head.

Tureri says (10:31 AM):
just some grammar, "he"
Tureri says (10:31 AM):
should be her right
Samuel says (10:32 AM):
hrm..
Samuel says (10:32 AM):
i though i changed that
Samuel says (10:33 AM):
oh i changed it but i didn't repost a new one
Tureri says (10:33 AM):
kk
Tureri says (10:33 AM):
im done, Im just gonna post this convo kk, under comments

Does I still got to comment on this when I was the one that had the conversation with Tureri?

No you don't I suppose,

Writing Report (Summary)
Quality - 6
Font - 8
Language - 8
Enjoyment - 6
Imagination - 4
Overall - 32/50 or 6/10

Yay! worse than Modern Warfare!